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I am an accomplished writer, and your story sounds like something a twelve year old would make up. Frankly, it sounds incredibly childish. Like something a child thinks about doing and gets bored in the middle. Your descriptions need work, if you are serious. Also, your story idea needs work. Although, yes, many girls do want to read about people just like them, do you really expect to publish a well written story at age 12? I can tell you aren't a good writer with the descriptions you've posted. Forgive me if I sound harsh, but I think of it as constructive criticism. It might help you become an accomplished writer someday. For interesting and unique names, go to www.namenerds.com.