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Jakayla Rae Borten
Nyasia Star Keegan
Joelle Corinne Chandler
Janessa McKenzie Francisco
Yoselin Bianka Merini
Katia Sheridan Kreamer
Astrid Veronique Total-Astrid
Jailyn Alyxzandrea Tirelle
Sigourney Raessa Coral

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I love the uniqueness of the names you picked, so I tried to give you unique middle names. I hope you like them.

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I used to write stories when I was young. Keep writing!

Jakayla Borten-a very smart girl who is the cleverest of them all
------- I don't care for the name Jakayla, so I can't be a fair judge. -------

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Nyasia Keegan-a fashion fanatic who is an okay student but can get into trouble if she isn't careful
------- See above comment. -------

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Yajaira Anjali Matin-I don't need a middle name for her. Yajaira is a girl who's main hobby is trouble and mischief
-------- Sorry, see above comment. -------

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Joelle Chandler-A girl who's never on this planet. She's in her own fantasy world!
------- It's OK. -------

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Janessa Francisco-A Chicago girl with a passion for fashion and shopping.
------- It works, but think about changing the surname. -------

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Yoselin Merini-a total tomboy who loves basketball and mysteries.
------- I don't see this as a tomboy name. -------

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Katia Kreamer-a "cool" girl who will always be insync
------- I suggest Katarina. -------

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Astrid Total-Astrid grew up in France, and has a secret even her best friend, Yajaira, doesn't know.
------- Sounds too made up. -------

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Jailyn Tirelle-another tomboy with so many things on her mind.
------- I suggest Jaylin. -------

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Sigourney Coral-a girl from a huge family who thinks small means 10 or more.
------- I see this as a "rich name." Does this girl come from a rich family? -------

Jakayla Borten-a very smart girl who is the cleverest of them all
------- I don't care for the name Jakayla, so I can't be a fair judge. -------

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Nyasia Keegan-a fashion fanatic who is an okay student but can get into trouble if she isn't careful
------- See above comment. -------

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Yajaira Anjali Matin-I don't need a middle name for her. Yajaira is a girl who's main hobby is trouble and mischief
-------- Sorry, see above comment. -------

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Joelle Chandler-A girl who's never on this planet. She's in her own fantasy world!
------- It's OK. -------

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Janessa Francisco-A Chicago girl with a passion for fashion and shopping.
------- It works, but think about changing the surname. -------

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Yoselin Merini-a total tomboy who loves basketball and mysteries.
------- I don't see this as a tomboy name. -------

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Katia Kreamer-a "cool" girl who will always be insync
------- I suggest Katarina. -------

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Astrid Total-Astrid grew up in France, and has a secret even her best friend, Yajaira, doesn't know.
------- Sounds too made up. -------

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Jailyn Tirelle-another tomboy with so many things on her mind.
------- I suggest Jaylin. -------

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Sigourney Coral-a girl from a huge family who thinks small means 10 or more.
------- I see this as a "rich name." Does this girl come from a rich family? -------

I am an accomplished writer, and your story sounds like something a twelve year old would make up. Frankly, it sounds incredibly childish. Like something a child thinks about doing and gets bored in the middle. Your descriptions need work, if you are serious. Also, your story idea needs work. Although, yes, many girls do want to read about people just like them, do you really expect to publish a well written story at age 12? I can tell you aren't a good writer with the descriptions you've posted. Forgive me if I sound harsh, but I think of it as constructive criticism. It might help you become an accomplished writer someday. For interesting and unique names, go to www.namenerds.com.