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I think that their pretty good, but Timmy should be Kevin, Nate, Jason, or Jared.

1. Mauranda- head strong, stubborn, leader never a follower, 5'7", average build, long straight black hair, greenish blue eyes, goth
------- Will this be pronounced like Miranda? If so, then I suggest spelling it as Miranda. -------

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2. Nikky- goofy, makes jokes about everything, 5'7", average, medium curly brown hair, blue eyes, not really ditz but childish
------- I think Nikky would be a good nickname for Nicole, so I suggest the real name be Nicole, and Nikky be the nickname. -------

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3. Luna- never serious, her ideal is Sailor Moon, 5'3", petit, medium straight blonde hair that later she dyes red then blue, light blue eyes, lots of make-up(never takes it off, only "touches" it up)
------- Althought the name is not my style, it fits. -------

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4. Kayla- very serious, quite, resembles a walking zombie, 5'10", petit, long straight brown hair, dark brown eyes, average human being
------- Good name. -------

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5. Adrian- lovable by anyone, 6'1", really thin but handsome, short dark brown hair, light blue eyes
------- Although I do not care for this name, it fits. -------

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6. Timmy- serious, but all the ladies want him, 5'11", average, short black hair, dark blue eyes
------- I don't see this name for a "ladies man." I suggest Brandon, Logan, Trevor, Joseph (nickname Joey), or Daniel (nickname Dan). -------

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Minor roles:
1. Mr. Seinabaugh aka Satanbaugh ------- No clue what you mean, but it looks interesting. -------
2. Mr. Nella aka.. Hitler Nell ------- See above comment. -------
3. Joel- jokester, brother of Luna, all ways finds away to tick satanbaugh off and hitler nell ------- I don't think Joel fits the description. I suggest Travis, Drake, Mark, Richard (nickname Richie), or James (nickname Jimmy). -------

If you would like to read this story when its done email me your address and I will send you a copy.
If you also have any suggestions for the character names or changes or whats the story about or if you would like to be added to the story.. It can be done..

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THanks for your time
Sare Jane